Comments on: Latest Innovation

By: Eric J. Krause

Eric J. Krause — Wed, 23 Sep 2009 06:20:58 +0000

Very nice story. I'm in the group wanting to know who's higher on the ladder than us.

By: Chris Chartrand

Chris Chartrand — Wed, 23 Sep 2009 00:14:23 +0000

Cool Idea. I also felt tossed out of the story by the discussion of dimentions. Other than that I thought it worked well. Nice job. ~Chris

By: J. M. Strother

J. M. Strother — Mon, 21 Sep 2009 02:32:42 +0000

Can the watering bottle be filled with Margaritas? With salt? ;)

Fun piece. I think it started out more like a monologue than a dialogue. I think a little more back and forth in the first half would have helped a little.
~jon

By: ganymeder

ganymeder — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 16:46:06 +0000

Ha! I was actually thinking this could be talking about humans, but that's probably my AR stripes showing! Very well done! It reminded me a little of "Planet of the Apes" and at the end a little like "Slaughterhouse five." :)

Cool peice! I think the dialogue works great.

By: CJ (hojpoj)

CJ (hojpoj) — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 14:09:54 +0000

The bit about the second port via tubing "providing unlimited mix and match possibilities" , made me laugh – nifty piece of flash, made me happy even with the twist. Isnt' this really just reality TV? heheh

By: mazzz_in_Leeds

mazzz_in_Leeds — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 13:31:39 +0000

Very good!
Hey, if we were pets, does that mean we could sleep all day like our cats and dogs do, and not have to go to work…?

By: @soesposito

@soesposito — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 13:28:14 +0000

LOL! Great little story and actually, I didn't even notice that it was all dialog as I was reading (eventhough you said so upfront). I was still busy envisioning all the little details as I read, so great job. "Accidently allowed them to breed." This cracked me up. :-)

By: netta

netta — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 13:20:10 +0000

I was distracted just a bit by all the dimensions given, but other than that, the description gave a clear picture of the living quarters. Turnabout is fair play!

Good job, especially from a sick bed! I was wondering about the keepers, too. And the removal system was particularly chilling.

By: @TheBusyMystic

@TheBusyMystic — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 05:21:58 +0000

Lovely! I would say the experiment worked! Although, I do have to add that your dialogue was and is very descriptive! Worked nicely with the piece, though – thanks for posting that!

By: Marisa Birns

Marisa Birns — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 22:09:52 +0000

Wow! A really nice flip on animal rights movement! Human rights!

A trap and removal device? You mean like the mousetraps that are sold all over the place, heh..

Glad you left your sick bed. Nicely done!